English wording proof-reading?

[Geert Janssens]

Hi,

One extra suggestion:

On Sunday 21 January 2007 23:22, David Hampton wrote:
> On Fri, 2007-01-19 at 14:22 +0100, Christian Stimming wrote:
> > gnc_error_dialog
> >  	(info->window,
> > -       /* Each of the %s is the name of the backend, e.g. "aqhbci". */
> > -	 _("The external program \"%s Setup Wizard\" returned a nonzero "
> > -	   "exit code which means it has not been finished successfully. "
> > -	   "The further HBCI setup can only be finished if the %s "
> > -	   "Setup Wizard is run successfully. Please try to start and "
> > -	   "successfully finish the %s Setup Wizard program again."),
> > -	 backend_name, backend_name, backend_name);
> > +	 _("The external program \"AqBanking Setup Wizard\" returned a "
> > +	   "nonzero exit code which means it has not been finished "
> > +	   "successfully.  The further Online Banking setup can only "
> > +	   "be finished if the AqBanking Setup Wizard is run successfully. "
> > +	   "Please try to start and successfully finish the AqBanking "
> > +	   "Setup Wizard program again."));
>
> A 'nonzero exit code' is programmer speak.  How about this:
>
>         The external program "AqBanking Setup Wizard" returned an
>         indication that it failed to create <something>.  Any further
>         Online Banking setup can only be performed if the AqBanking
>         Setup Wizard is run successfully.  Please try running the
>         AqBanking Setup Wizard again.
>

To me the new suggestion still seems to contain too many indirections. How 
about:
          The external program "AqBanking Setup Wizard" failed to run
          successfully. Online Banking can only be setup if this wizard
          has run successfully.
          Please try to run the "AqBanking Setup Wizard" again.

Optionally a hint could be added where to look for information (a log or 
something) that could be passed when asking for help (like on a forum or 
mailing list). Or would that also become too technical ?

Regards,

Geert